Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Labour day will coming soon in a month and I plan to go to Guangzhou. As I know Guangzhou has a perfect zoo called Changlong zoo，I extremely would like to go. Also，Guangzhou has very delicious morning tea and I would enjoy it there. But，this plan is still considering because it must have too many people going Guangzhou during Labour day. The air ticket must more expensive than other time and would more difficult to book hotel as well…So，the worst result that I will stay in Shanghai.

Your Edited Email

Labour day is coming soon, in a month, and I plan to go to Guangzhou. As far as I know Guangzhou has a perfect / amazing / incredible zoo called Changlong zoo，which I would really like to go to. Also，Guangzhou has very delicious morning tea (if you mean “zao cha” the food, you should say “yum cha” or “dim sum”) and I would enjoy it there. But，this plan is still being considered / I’m still considering this plan because I’m sure there will be too many people going Guangzhou during Labour day. The air ticket / the flight must be more expensive than other times and I think it will be more difficult to book hotels as well…So，the worst result would be that that I just stay in Shanghai.