Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Today I wanna recommend a new-opening supermarket to you, which is Wowmart. Wowmart is useful to you if you wanna pick up any necessities and groceries at once. More importantly, the location of the supermarket is super convenient. Not only can you drive there but also you can take bus and subway to get there. Yeah, the transport is pretty good. Compared to other supermarkets, Wowmart is extremely enormous ,cozy and well decorated. You definitely feel comfy whenever you go there. The sections in Wowmart are divided clearly, you can find what you want immediately through the signs by the escalators. If you have signed up for VIP, you can spend your member points on getting some extra gifts. As for the price, all the stuffs are bargain , also food and vegetables are way fresher than any other small markets. So if you wanna buy all things at once, Wowmart is suitable for you.

Your Edited Email

Today I wanna recommend a newly opened supermarket to you, which is called / named Wowmart. Wowmart is / would be useful to you if you wanna pick up any necessities or groceries quickly. More importantly, the location of the supermarket is super convenient. Not only can you drive there but also you can take the bus or / and subway to get there, so it’s quite convenient in terms of how to get there. Compared to other supermarkets, Wowmart is extremely enormous / extremely big, cozy and well decorated. You would definitely feel comfy whenever you go there. The sections there are divided clearly, so you can immediately find what you want via / by using the signs by the escalators. If you have signed up for the VIP membership / to be a VIP, you can spend your member points on getting some extra gifts. As for the price, everything is a bargain , and food and vegetables are way fresher than any other small markets. So if you wanna buy everything at once / in one go, Wowmart would be suitable for you.

-Remember: wanna is very casual so if you’re going to be writing like this, it’s not something you should be using. “Want to” or “would like to” is much more suitable