Email Service Notes (Cricket)

Your Original Email

I attended a party for the communication of GUQING (古琴, a very traditional Chinese instrument) yesterday, the purpose of it was to build a connection with students and teachers, to practice the playing skill, and share the thoughts of GUQING with each other.

This party was half-public, which was open to his students and people knew it through the information on some specific public websites. When we were ready to start our performance, a foreigner knocked door and said he would like to have a look. We were a little surprised because we hadn’t have foreigners visited here before. We were curious that who recommend him to come here and how he find this place. (the location of our class is difficult to find for the first visit)

Your Edited Email

I attended a party for the communication of GUQING (古琴, a very traditional Chinese instrument) yesterday. The purpose of it was to build a connection between students and teachers, to practice their playing skills, and share each others thoughts about GUQING.

The party was half-public, it was open to( his ) we don’t know whose students—-students and people who knew about it through information given on certain public websites. When we were about to start our performance, a foreigner knocked on the door and said he would like to have a look. We were a little surprised because we haven’t had any foreigners visit here before. We were curious about who recommended him and how he found the place. (the location of our class is difficult to find for the first visit)