Email Service Notes 30th October
Your Original Email
Dear teacher,I’m Summer (Fengzhi), this is my email,please help me to check it, thanks a lot.
October 29, 2015
Today is my third day in Beijing, I have a business trip in Beijing. Before I want to go back on tomorrow but I haven’t finished my work yet. So I need to stay here until I finish my work. Recently I need to design two layouts. They are all more than 1000 square. This work sometimes need me too much time, I need to consider it again and again to find a good way to show our company’s products, It’s like a experiment. I really hope I can finish it very soon because I really don’t like stay outside for long time.
Your Edited Email
Dear teacher,I’m Summer (Fengzhi), and this is my email,please help me to check it, thanks a lot.
October 29, 2015
Today is the third day of my business trip to Beijing. I was planning to go back tomorrow but I haven’t finished my work yet, so I need to stay here until I have. Recently I have been designing two layout which are both more than 1000 square metres. Sometimes I need to spend a lot of time on this job. I need to consider things again and again to find a good way to show our company’s products….. like a experiment. I really hope I can finish it very soon because I really don’t like to be out of shanghai for such a long time.
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