Email Service Notes 29th August (Celeste)

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I went to Korea a few months ago and it was a pretty interesting trip.The overall impression of Korea was that almost everyone in Korea focused on their dressing and they all look delicate.Both women and men made up in this country especially young people.As we all know,Korean cosmetic industry is very famous across the globe and lots of native brands dominate the international market.There were so many coffee shops there as well.

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I went to Korea a few months ago and it was a pretty interesting trip. My overall impression of Korea was that almost everyone in Korea focused on their appearance and they all looked delicate. Both women and men made up in this country especially young people. As we all know, the Korean cosmetic industry is very famous across the globe and lots of native brands dominate the international market.There were so many coffee shops there as well.

Hi Caroline –

What does this mean?

“Both women and men made up in this country especially young people.”

Young people make up most of the population in Korea.

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In your next class, I suggest reviewing this email with your teacher. Other than that, great job! 🙂

Celeste