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I saw a news clip as follows:

Britain said it will introduce the Worlds first public register of the owners of foreign companies holding property in the country. The move comes in response to growing concern over tax-evaders and money-launderers use of shell companies to hide their identities. Most overseas companies that own property in London are registered in tax havens, particularly the British virgin islands.

My question is why not:

Britain said it will introduce the Worlds first public register of the owners of foreign companies holding property in the country. The move comes in response to growing concern over tax-evaders and money-launderers about using shell companies to hide their identities. Most overseas companies that own property in London are registered in the tax havens, particularly the British virgin islands.

News articles are more direct with wording and phrases. The original phrase is short and to the point and more native and stylistic to journalistic writing. Newspaper articles follow certain rules, laws, and styles that you won’t see in spoken English or written English in other places.