Email Service Notes 15th April (Ben)

Pretty good, Jasmine ! Pay attention to your tenses.

If it’s in the past, then every verb is in the past ! 🙂

Original

I drank the yogurt two days ago and I want went to Smart English have a class. I don’t like yogurt but I am hungry and I want lost weight. Actually I have a little like this yogurt. The yogurt tasted was good and had a little sweet. I bought this yogurt in Sunday Smile by Sunflour in In Oenter. The Sunday Smile by Sunflour translate into Chinese it’s taste sunshine the name is beautiful,isn’t it? This bakery’s bread is really tasty but expensive too. But that can’t stop me like and eat them. This yogurt is not thick so l can use straw to drink it. It’s convenient.

Edited version

I drank a yogurt two days ago and I want went to Smart English to have a class.

I don’t like yogurt but I was hungry and I want to lose weight. Actually I liked this yogurt a little.

The yogurt tasted was good and was a little sweet.

I bought this yogurt at “Sunday Smile by Sunflour” in Xingyou Center.

“Sunday Smile by Sunflour” translates to “taste the sunshine” in Chinese.

That name is beautiful,isn’t it? This bakery’s bread is really tasty but also expensive.

But that can’t stop me from liking and eating it.

This yogurt is not thick so l can use a straw to drink it. It’s convenient.