Demo Class Notes (Robin – Georges)

Write a short piece about your trip to Iceland

Vocabulary

Rent- When you pay to use something each day or month.

e.g. When most foreigners move to Shanghai, they rent an apartment to live in.

Vivid-Something that seems very real.

e.g. I had such a vivid dream last night, I couldn’t tell if I was sleeping or not.

Grammar

Last year, I go to Iceland- I went to Iceland

Pronunciation

Variety- vah-ry-eh-tee

Original 

Last year I had a travel at Iceland. That’s y first time to Europe. Got a lot of interesting things. I drive myself at Iceland, and look at golden cycle. It’s very interesting. And in this week, I will go to australia, to australia I make a project to jump the sky . In Iceland, it happened a very interesting thing. I travelled Iceland with three girls just me one man. I drive all day at one night I drived, I crossed a red light and policeman lanzhu, I afraid i can’t speak well. I try to my best to explain why i do this, and i make the driver icense to show to him, and he talked to me a lot of things. I make myself just like this. and finally im lucky, he let me go. That’s my first time to face to a foreigner. That’s why I want to have talk with foreigner, but I feel nervous. And my vocabulary is very few so usually I can’t understand, if the foreigner talk something.

Corrected

Last year I travelled to Iceland. That was my first time visiting Europe. I saw OR experienced  a lot of interesting things. In Iceland, I rented a car and went to go see the golden circle. It’s very interesting. This week, I will go to Australia to start a project on skydiving. In Iceland, a very interesting thing happened. I was travelling in Iceland with three girls, who were friends of mine from China. I drove all day and one night as I was driving I crossed a red light and policeman stopped me, I was afraid because I can’t speak much English. I tried my best to explain why i did this, and i showed him my drivers license. He told me a lot of things. I tried my best to communicate and finally i got/was lucky because he let me go. That’s the first time I came face to face with a foreigner. That’s why I want be able to talk with foreigners, but I feel nervous. And my vocabulary is limited so usually I can’t understand what they are saying.

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