VIP Class Notes (Nicholas)[S]

Please correct her writing homework. We are doing speaking exercises for Part 1, 2 and 3 for IELTS. Her speaking exam is Wednesday.

Original 

I came from Henan I was born at a small town in Henan. My hometown is or beautiful small city I study and grows at there for 15 years. Then I left my hometown for my study. My hometown was small than Shanghai and there were not very economically – than SH but maybe the population in our hometown are larger than SH.

My respect person is or Chiense woman she is older than me she is or writer and I know her from the TV and her books because I like her poems. There was something wrong with her brain when she was borned but she loved the life and she have lots of poems about life- -about her self life I can study from her poems about how to rethink my life so that s why I respect her. She has a bad marriage her husband was bad to her so she write down her thoughts.

I tihink the attitude to the new things are different / is different between the young people and the old people. This is the most important part. Because with the development of our life there are lots of new things appearing nowadays lots of old people cannot suit in the fast life.

No I dont think so I think the old people should go out and to travel they will enjoy the new life after their required / retirement / retired. 

Yes I think so because I think everyone is the special one even though there are some people who had made some / made some mistakes but maybe the other part of their life or their act are well.

Corrected  

I come from Henan I was born in a small town in Henan. My hometown is a beautiful small city I studied  and grew up there for 15 years. Then I left my hometown for my studies. My hometown was smaller than Shanghai and there were not very many economic opportunities / there was not a strong economy / and people were poorer – compared to SH but maybe the population in our hometown is larger than SH.

The person I respect the most is a Chinese woman she is older than me she is a writer and I knew her from the TV and her book.  I really like her poems. There was something wrong with her brain when she was born but she loved her life and she wrote lots of poems about life- -about her own life I can study her poems about how to rethink my life so that is why I respect her. She had a bad marriage her husband was bad to her so she wrote down her thoughts.

I think old people have different attitudes about new things /I think the attitudes  are different between the young people and the old people. This is the most important part / this is the biggest difference. Because with the development of our life there are lots of new things appearing nowadays lots of old people cannot get used to the fast paced life / don’t understand this fast paced life.

No I dont think so I think the old people should go out and to travel then they will enjoy their new life after their required / retirement / retired. 

Yes I think so because I think everyone is special even though there are some people who had made some mistake / made some mistakes but maybe the other parts of their life are good.

Original 

Yes I enjoy writing and I write everyday. Maybe at least one hour for each day. Sometimes I write about my thoughts – my feelings of the things that happen on day. And sometimes I write stories. I often write some diaries everyday.

Yes I like traveling by car but I almost haven’t drive a car to travel , I think traveling by a car can make me free I can stop or decide to continue my traveling everywhere / anywhere.

I can drive a car but I have maybe 5 years not drive a car.

When I was studied in high school there was a band I favorite – there name is Shui Mu NIan Hua – there music was very popular and the words about their songs are very nice and they encourage me. I knew them through their popular songs – everyone knew about them and lots of students in my high school very much maybe everyone can sing their songs very well.

Yes I like singing very much even though nowadays I have no time to sing in the KTV but I always sing in my room when I want to relax or I have some difficult I will sing by myself.

The sincere feeling I think – and I prefer the words about songs – I think thats very important for a singer.

Maybe there – there will be many different types about benefits through singing – for example for me the benefits will be the happiness and strength (P) for the other people maybe the benefits will be the money.

I think the music industry would be more better in the future because everything is developing and music industry can create new music. I think the music industry will be changed more better – people in city have lots of actors / anxious these days / nowadays and more and more people realize that the traditional musics are important so a majority of young people choose to learn the traditional music and I think it’s better for the development of different styles about musics.

Corrected  

Yes I enjoy writing and I write everyday. Maybe at least one hour for each day / one hour a day / one hour daily. Sometimes I write about my thoughts and my feelings of things that happen each day. And sometimes I write stories. I often write a diary everyday.

Yes I like traveling by car but I almost never drive by car to travel , I think traveling by a car makes me feel more free / independent / gives me more freedom. I can stop or decide to continue my traveling anytime or any place/ anywhere.

I can drive a car but I haven’t driven a car for maybe 5 years.

When I studied in high school there was a band I loved / that was my favorite  – there name was Shui Mu Nian Hua – their  music was very popular and the words in their songs  / lyrics of their songs were very nice and they encouraged me. I knew them through their popular songs – everyone knew about them and lots of students in my high school love them very much maybe everyone could sing their songs very well.

Yes I like singing very much even though nowadays I have no time to sing at KTV but I always sing in my room when I want to relax or I have some difficulties I will sing by myself.

The sincere feeling I think – and I prefer interesting lyrics – I think thats very important for a singer.

Maybe there – there are  many different types of  benefits for singing – for example for me the benefits will be happiness and strength (P) for the other people maybe the benefits will be the money.

I think the music industry would be more better in the future because everything is developing and music industry can create new music. I think the music industry will be changed for the better / or will become better / will get better – people in cities are very anxious  / have lots of anxiety nowadays and more and more people realize that traditional music is  important so a majority of young people choose to learn traditional music and I think it’s better for the development of different styles of music .

Vocabulary

I have difficulties.
my life is difficult.

independent – 独立

retirement – 退休
old people retire and travel the world.
my grandpa is retired.

music industry – 行业

sorry let me rephrase that / sorry let me say that again

Pronunciation

a – UH

strength – STRAY-UNGTH