VIP Class Notes (Nicholas) [S/W]

Write an email and give me an update 更新 or tell me about your current project.
What are you doing at work right now? What are you working on? Tell me in a quick email.

Email Writing Template

Original

Dear Mr. or Ms,

I hope this mail finds you well.

My name is Xin Qian and I am a clinical research associate in the company of MSD China. Let me introduce information about MSD to you. MSD is an American pharmaceutical company which locates in New jersey. In America and Canada, it is called MERCK, but in other countries, it is MSD. There are nearly 70000 employees all over the world. In 2014, overall total income reached 42.2 billion dollars, the expenses on research was 6.5 billion dollars.

The management range of our company are prescription medicine, vaccine, biological products, and animal care medicine.

On 19Jul2018, the magazine FORTUNE chose 500 strong companies of the world , MSD was no. 276.

China is the vital part of MSD in global improvement plan. The headquarters of MSD China is in Shanghai, directly report to America, total employees number in China is nearly 5 thousands.

Above is the short introduction of MSD, If you have other problems, feel free to contact me.

Kind regards and have a nice day.

Xin Qian

Corrected

To whom it may concern,

I hope this email / message finds you well.

My name is Kelsey Qian and I am a clinical research associate at MSD China. I would like to introduce MSD to you. MSD is an American pharmaceutical company located in New Jersey. In the United States and Canada, it is called MERCK, but in other countries, it is called MSD. There are nearly 70,000 employees all over the world. In 2014, total income reached 42.2 billion dollars while research expenses were 6.5 billion dollars.

The product range of our company spans / includes prescription medicine, vaccines, biological products, and animal care medicine.

In July 2018, FORTUNE magazine chose the strongest 500 companies in the world  — MSD was ranked 276.

China is a vital part of MSD’s global improvement plan. The headquarters of MSD China is in Shanghai, directly reporting to America with total employees numbering nearly five thousand.

Above is a short introduction of MSD！. If you have other questions, please feel free to contact me.

Kind regards and have a nice day.

Kelsey Qian

Original

I come from Shandong province. Shandong is located in the northeast of China. It has a large number of people.  Because it’s my hometown. I have one brother – younger brother. Because I studied in SH – Fudan University, undergraduate

It is because I work harder than other people. Because I have to take some organs to extract some cells / some proteins.

High school because many students will attend gao kaolin so only a small number of students could go into university.

Corrected

I come from Shandong province. Shandong is located in the northeast of China. It has a large number of people.  I love Shandong because it’s my hometown. I have one brother – an older brother. I came to SH because I studied in SH – I went to Fudan University for my undergraduate degree.

I got higher grades / I received high marks / I had a strong GPA because I work harder than other people. I had to kill some animals because I had to take some organs to extract some cells / some proteins.

High school because many students will attend gao kao so only a small number of students can go into / [attend] university.

Pronunciation

proteins

Vocabulary

go to – [attend]

GPA – 等级点平均值
e.g I had a very high GPA in university.

graduate school – 研究所
e.g. Kelsey didn’t go to graduate school.
e.g. Graduate school is after undergraduate school.

public university – 公立大学
e.g. Public universities are cheaper than private universities.

Grammar

What you usually do = Present Tense
I am tired because I work from morning until night.
I am tired because I worked from morning until night.

Telling a story = Past Tense
I worked 80 hours last week.

during = when did you do this
what did you study in school?
what did you study during school?
I learned English during class with Nicholas
I studied pharmacology during university.
During my childhood I learned to ride a bike.

if + then
if you went to Fudan then you must be smart
if you get a good job then you will have money
if you study at Smart English then you will be a good speaker!

I should have graduated in 2012, but I graduated in 2011
I was supposed to graduate in 2012, but I graduated in 2011

I went to America – I am not here anymore.
I go to America.
I came to Shanghai – I am here now.
I want to go to America