VIP Class Notes (Nicholas)[S]

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Grammar

he needed to have many wives / he wanted to have more wives

no communicate with each other / no communication with one another / did not communicate with each other

but his wife give up her career after they get married / but his wife gave up

I’m don’t interest in it / I’m not intetested in it

I’m scared / I’m afraid / I am easily scared

I want to have more trips / I want to travel more

it’s not have much difference from my rest of life / it’s not much different from the rest of my life

three years ago / three years old

Original – Paragraph 1

i think its up to the coupels ages and personality for example if i get married my husband have a girlfriend i will divorce immediately but if i have a choice i wanna right; if he have a girlfriend i think he exactly betrayed me so i think i wann have a new life with my child if i have a child. i think its a better way to care my child about respect and loyal.

Correction

I think it depends on the couple’s age and personality. For example, if I get married, and my husband has a girlfriend, I will divorce him immediately. But if I have the choice I want to make it right. If he has a girlfriend I think he has betrayed me, so I think I would want a new life with my child — if I had a child. I think it’s a better way to teach my child about respect and loyalty.

Original – Paragraph 2

I think/see (p) both successful and unsuccessful marriages. for ex if the couples are older 40 years old maybe they won’t divorce because shamed or embarassed, but if couples are younger most of them will divorce. If they think their marriage is happiness maybe it’s a happy ending. But if they’re husband betrayed them maybe I think they will divorce with their husband.

Corection – Paragraph 2

I know both successful and unsuccesful married couples/I have seen both successful and unsuccessful marriages. For example, if the couple is older than 40 years old — maybe they won’t divorce because of shame or embarassment, but if a couple is younger usually they will divorce. If they think they have a happy marriage, maybe they will have a happy ending. But if their husband betrayed them, maybe I think they will divorce their husband.

Original – Paragraph 3

if the husband or the wide didn’t / doesn’t make big istake maybe they will continue their marriage.

Most Chinese wife think their husband should get a good job and earn more money than themselves. I want a have a husband who is excellent than me — so maybe he will get more salary than me, but I can support my life, I’m not really care about it.

He must be kind and loyal and love my parents and my friends. That is really important than money. It is also very important that this guy want to have happiness family with me.

Correction – Paragraph 3

If the husband or wife doesn’t make a big mistake then maybe they will continue with their marriage.

Most Chinese wives think their husband should get a good job and earn more money than them. I want to have a husband who is more excellent than me (better than me) — so perhaps his salary will be higher than mine — but I can support my lifestyle, I don’t really care about this.

Original – Paragraph 4

Actually I’m really busy but if I have a family maybe I want to change my job or my position. I’d like to spend more time with my family than with job.

But I think it’s only one question: it’s up to you how to definite satisfy for a woman. For example, I choice family. I think I don’t want a career woman. It’s just a job. If I dont’ like it I will quit it. I don’t want to change once a year. I spend more time in the past half and year, but I got worried, my work make me unhappy, So I realized I needed to spend more time on my life.

Correction – Paragraph 4

Actually I’m really busy, but if I had a family, maybe I would want to change my job or my position I’d like to spend more time with my family rather than with my job.

But I think there’s only one question: it depends on how you define a successful woman. For exmaple, I would choose a family. I’m not that interested in being a “career woman”. It’s just a job. If I don’t like it, I will quit. I don’t want to change my husband every year. I have spent more time in the past year and a half, but I was relieved once I realized I should spend more time on my life.

• It’s not happening, so we use the word WOULD.