VIP Class Notes (Nicholas) [W/S]

Original

Yes,cell phones are very important in my country,maybe every person has at least one cell phone.

People use cell phones very often because of that cell phones are completely useful in our daily life.First and foremost, people need to connect others through cell phones as they can solve lots of time. Additionally ,people also can use their cell phones to read electronic books for studying and to listen to different styles of musics or to play some games for relaxing. Last but not least,more and more people choose to pay the bills by using their cell phones replace to pay by crash . In conclusion , I think that are the reasons which people use cell phones very well.

Besides my knowledge,lots of types of apps are appearing nowadays such as apps for reading,shopping and traveling……These different style apps satisfy people’s requirements not only interesting but also useful.Hence,they are very popular.

Corrected

Yes, cell phones are very important in my country, maybe every person has at least one cell phone.

People use cell phones very often because cell phones are very useful in our daily lives. First and foremost, people need to connect with each other  through / by using cell phones as they can save lots of time. Additionally ,people also can use their cell phones to read electronic books for studying and to listen / for listening to different styles of music / songs or to play some games to relax / for relaxation . Last but not least,more and more people choose to pay their bills by using their cell phones which replaces paying by cash . In conclusion , I think these are the reasons why people use cell phones very well.

Besides my knowledge,lots of types of apps are appearing nowadays such as apps for reading,shopping and traveling……These different styles of apps / app styles satisfy people’s requirements not only are they interesting but also useful. Hence ,they are very popular.

Original – Part 1

Yes I like to take photo with something I prefer such as different people, different animals, and different buildings. When I travel to some places I often take lots of photos for the scenery. When I travel to abroad I will take both a phone and camera because I need to take some photos for me to prepare my paintings.

Corrected – Part 2

Yes I like to take photos of things that I prefer such as different people, different animals, and different buildings. When I travel to some places I often take lots of photos of the scenery. When I travel abroad I will take both a phone and camera because I need to take some photos to help me prepare my paintings.

Original – Part 2

I want tell you a person who’s name is Gun Tian Le. I think he’s very handsome because of his well dress and his face and his heart. I knew him long time ago when I was a little girl I knew him and I liked him cuz I saw him on TV he was a hero / our hero and he was interesting handsome in movies so thats why I think he is handsome and the most important reason is that he’s very careful people / mindful people he did lots of things free for the poor people.

Corrected – Part 2

I want tell you of a / about a person who’s name is Gu Tian Le. I think he’s very handsome because he is well-dressed and his face and his heart. I first knew him from a long time ago when I was a little girl I knew him and I liked him because I saw him on TV he was a hero and he was interesting and handsome in movies so thats why I think he is handsome and the most important reason is that he’s a very kind person  / a good person he does lots of things for free for  poor people.

Original – Part 3

Yes I think most of people care about this because this is the first feeling about a stranger. Of course their inner qualities because the good looking can be disappearance but the inner quality will be sunshine. I think it’s not bad – I think they can give young women (pronunciation good) a good enjoy feeling. I prefer the natural place because the natural place have lots of trees flowers and you can put yourself inside it for relax. The magazine I think whatever man or woman – when they saw the magazine about the thing beautiful models they will feel happy, and they will have the thoughts to be a better man or woman.

Corrected – Part 3

Yes I think most of people care about this because this is the first feeling you get about a stranger. Of course their inner qualities because good looks will disappear but the inner qualities will stay forever / never disappear. I think it’s not bad – I think they can give young women warm feelings / good feelings / feelings of happiness / feelings of joy / joyful feelings / happy feelings. I prefer the natural places because natural places have lots of trees flowers and you can relax here. The magazine I think whatever man or woman – when they see the magazine about beautiful models they will feel happy, and they will have thoughts to be a better man or woman.

Young women + how they look
sorry let me rephrase that

Original – Part 1

I usually watch movies with my friends. When some interesting movies come on – let me rephrase that – I always watch movies with my friends. And also I always go to some shopping malls to eat some delicious food. Very long time maybe 13 years. We will see each other at next month we decided to watch a movie / drama at the next month. Yes I like to spend time with my best friends. Yes I think it’s very important for me when I have some difficulties I will call my best friends and tell her my worries and when I have something happy I also tell my friends.  Maybe they are as same important from me both the family and the friendship.

Corrected – Part 1

I usually watch movies with my friends. When some interesting movies come on – let me rephrase that – I always watch movies with my friends. And also I always go to some shopping malls to eat some delicious food. Very long time maybe 13 years. We will see each other at next month we decided to watch a movie / drama at the next month. Yes I like to spend time with my best friends. Yes I think it’s very important for me when I have some difficulties I will call my best friends and tell her my worries and when I have something happy I also tell my friends.  Maybe both of them are equally important to me / they are the same for me.

Original – Part 2

I would like to share a person who I want like to be similar to. This person is a man. And I like him very much. His name is Liu Yung. He was born in Taiwan and I knew him from his books he is good at education when he was young he studied painting and then he educated – then he became a teacher at one university in Taiwan but last he decided to came to America to do a new part for his work. His attitude about everything impresses me for example he’s attitude to his family members.

Corrected – Part 2

I would like to share about a person who I would like / want to be similar to. This person is a man. And I like him very much. His name is Liu Yong. He was born in Taiwan and I knew him from his books he is good at education / learning when he was young he studied painting and then he became a teacher at one university in Taiwan but lastly / and then finally he decided to come to America to do a new part of his work. His attitude about everything impresses me for example his attitude toward his family members.

Original – Part 3

I think everyone has some good habits or bad habits but for example – take an example – take my experience for example I have some good habits and some bad habits such as I always get up early for studying I think this is a good habit for me. I think it is very important that parents should cultivate good habits in their children such as to eat meals on time, and fall asleep on time. Maybe the one reason is that their parents made a bad example for them and the other reason I think the children are very young they will learn lots of things from people around them. So if someone have bad habits they don’t know it’s wrong so they will follow the adults.

Corrected – Part 3

Take my experience for example I have some good habits and some bad habits such as I always get up early to study I think this is a good habit for me. I think it is very important that parents should cultivate good habits in their children such as to eat meals on time, and fall asleep on time. Maybe the one reason is that their parents made a bad example for them and the other reason I think is that the children are very young they will learn lots of things from people around them. So if someone has bad habits they don’t know it’s wrong so they will follow the adults.

Grammar

save time 
save money
solve problems 
solve issues

Vocabulary

scenery – 风景