VIP Class Notes (Nicholas) [S/W]

Original

Today my assistant and I discussed travel plans. We will go to USA to take part in the burningman activities. It is very interesting party,which set up in the desert.The artists will building many art sculpture in there and will burn it at zhe last day.The burning man activities for seven days. We must rent a car and buy food and water for these days，becaus there is nothing in the desert even if any service. Everything that we need we should be arranged. My friend told us this is a difficult activities,much less we are the first time to enter it. Whatever,I think it will be a exciting travel.

Corrected 

Today my assistant and I discussed travel plans. We will go to the USA / the US to take part in Burning Man / to attend Burning Man. It is a very interesting party, which / that is set up in the desert.The artists will build many art sculptures in there and will burn it on the last day.Burning Man lasts for seven days. We must rent a car, buy food, and water for the festival，because there is nothing in the desert or any services. Everything that we need we should arrange ourselves / we must bring. My friend told us this is a difficult activity, especially since this is our first time. Regardless, I think it will be an exiting trip.

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Original

From my little sister – she like the things maybe free-spirited and strange, and everything she has not seen, and she will like it. We have a group and every people of the group will go to the Burning Man so I know someone is bring the twin baby, and some will bring her mother. Maybe Chinese people thinks Burning Man is an interesting trip, I think the first time to the Burning Man we will – many Chinese the first to the Burning Man.

Corrected

I heard about it from my little sister – she likes the things that are free-spirited and strange, and she wants to see everything that she hasn’t seen before, and she will like it. We have a group and every person in the group will go to the Burning Man so I know someone who is bringing the twin babies, and someone will even bring their mother. Maybe Chinese people think that Burning Man is an interesting trip, I think for many Chinese people this will be their first time to Burning Man.

Vocabulary

rollercoaster – 过山车
When you ride a rollercoaster it takes your picture.

one house has 4 floors / 4 stories
it’s a 4 story designer hotel

lane house – old style Shanghainese houses in the French Concession – shi ku men
I have lived in a lane house for one year.

bring – 带来
Don’t forget to bring water to Burning Man!

free spirited – 自由奔放
My sister is very free spirited. She loves trying new things!

Grammar

too small to me
too small for me

very expensive than that last night
even more expensive than the one from last night

maybe they can sold it 599 RMB
maybe they can sell it for 599 RMB

the tickets is so difficult to buy / get
the tickets are so difficult to buy / get

Pronunciation

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