VIP Class Notes (Kyle) [S]

Speaking exercise

Original Version

During PE Class we watched movie. The movie was about, I don’t what his job was in English. I think he is a young man. I can’t explain it is too difficult to. We saw the black cloud when the storm coming and the rain start. Wind. I saw the lightening from the cloud and after a few seconds I heard thunder. My school is in Jingan area. The Lightening was maybe 6 or 7 km away. Everybody was inside the school. When I came to Smart English, the storm stopped.

Corrected Version: 

During PE Class we watched a movie. I don’t know what the movie was really about because we only watched it for 40 minutes. I think the main character was a young man. I can’t explain the plot, because we only watched part of the movie. We watched a movie because there was a storm during our school hours today. We saw a big black cloud when the storm coming and the rain started. There was also a lot of wind but not at our school. I saw the lightening from the cloud and after a few seconds I heard thunder. My school is in Jingan area. The Lightening was maybe 6 or 7 km away. Everybody was inside the school. When I came to Smart English, the storm had stopped.


Vocabulary

the main character

the Plot = Story

take place =

Action = lots of things happening, busy,