VIP Class Notes (George) [S]

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Do the writing task  TPo2 -o5

Task TP04 Task 1

Original

I miss my homemade food when I’m away. I’m from northeast china so the food from my home so its not as popular as other regions cuisine in China or the world. Its not so easy to find a restaruatns to . You will soon find out the favor is not what you used to I havent to dinner restuarant in America and the food was the best in that trip but the chef in that restauratnt is American. It sounds like a joke right.

Corrected

I miss my homemade food when I’m away. I’m from northeast china so the food from my home is not as popular as other regions cuisine in China or the world. Its not so easy to find a restaurant that serves that kind of food. You will soon find out the flavor is not what you’re used to.  I happened to have dinner at a restaurant in America and the food was the best in that trip but the chef in that restaurant is American. It sounds like a joke right.

TPo4 Task 2

Original

I think courses over the internet are much better than traditional classroom learning ways, one reason is we can have courses via internet and save a lot of time on the way to the classroom and back the second reason is sometimes the professor and the students are away from the uni for business trip or went to see parents with this internet online courses , both professors and students will not miss any classes.

Corrected

I think courses over the internet are much better than traditional classroom learning ways, one reason is we can have courses via the internet and save a lot of time on the way to the classroom and back. the second reason is sometimes the professor and the students are away from the uni for business trips or they went to see parents. With these online courses , both professors and students will not miss any classes.

TPO4 Task 3

Original

He thinks the night courses is a bad idear the first reason is most students have a very full schedule in the evening they have some social activities part time jobs or have to do their homework. It’s hard for them to spare some time for this  evening course. Haering more teachers is more expensive than buying more computers because the computers are getting more and more cheaper, and the classroom is big enough for more computers.

Corrected

He thinks that taking the night courses is a bad idea. the first reason is most students have a very full schedule in the evening they have some social activities part time jobs or have to do their homework. It’s hard for them to spare some time for this evening course. Hiring more teachers is more expensive than buying more computers because the computers are getting cheaper, and the classroom is big enough to house/accommodate/hold more computers.

TP04 Task 4

Original

In the two examples by the professor we can see that there is some difference in the verbal expression and non verbals expressions. The character in the examples tried to hide their thought of feeling by verbal expression but their facial expression and body movement showed what they really thought or felt. People can lie with verbal languages but its very hard to lie with body languages too.

Corrected

In the two examples given by the professor we can see that there is some difference in verbal and non-verbal expressions. In the examples, the character  tried to hide his thoughts or feelings but his facial expression and body movement showed what he really thought or felt. People can lie with verbal language but its very hard to lie with body language.

TPo4 Task 5

Original

The man’s problem is that he forgot to take his schedule on the first day and he didn’t know which classroom he should go to. The woman gave him two suggestions the suggestion is to try all three possible classrooms is the right way in that situation because he didn’t have enough time to check his schedule in the library and he still has 1 third chance to luck out at the first trial.

Corrected

The man’s problem is that he forgot to take his schedule on the first day and he didn’t know which classroom he should go to. I would agree with the woman’s second suggestion that he try all three possible classrooms. I think this is the right way in that situation because he didn’t have enough time to check his schedule in the library and he still has  1 in 3 chances to luck out on his first try.

TPo4 Task 6

Original

The lecturer was trying to say that painters visual elements such as colors and textures such as red always converys the strong emotion like joy and anger the color blue always conveys conveys the feeling of calm or sad. As to the texture painters always use soft texture to convey calm, so the point is paiting always conveys the painters emotions and the emotions was reflected by vvarious visual elements such as color and textures

Corrected

The lecturer was trying to say that painters use visual elements such as colors and textures  to express different emotions. For example, red  conveys strong emotions like joy and anger while the color blue always conveys a feeling of calm or sadness. As for texture, painters use soft textures to convey calm, so the point is painting always conveys the painters emotions and the emotions are reflected by various visual elements a painter uses such as color and textures.

TPO5 Task 1

Original

There is only one place I enjoyed going to all the time. It was a small bookstore where I can find all the latest comic books, I spent all my pocket money there and I bought all comics books such as dragon balls. I read whatever I can find, and I really enjoyed the time I spend  in the bookstore.

Correct

There is only one place I enjoyed going to all the time. It was a small bookstore where I could find all the latest comic books, I spent all my pocket money there and I bought all comics books such as dragon balls. I read whatever I could find, and I really enjoyed the time I spent  in there.

TPo5 Task 2

Original

Someone says its more important to study science than literature, not everyone in the world has to be  an engineer or work out math problems but it’s very necessary for everyone to enjoy music or literature. We can share or discuss the feeling when we meet in our spare time.

Corrected

Some people say its more important to study science than literature, not everyone in the world has to be  an engineer or work out math problems but it’s very necessary for everyone to enjoy music or literature. We can share or discuss our opinions when we meet in our spare time.

TPo5 Task 3

Original

He thinks this new announcement is a good idea because on one hand it is a good practice for the student who will prepare the food on the second hind it is a good opportunity to enjoy food they normally can only get in an expensive restaurant in town and now they will have a chance to get the delicious food in a very low price.

Corrected

He thinks this new announcement is a good idea because on the one hand it is good practice for the students studying culinary arts.  On the other hand, it is a good opportunity to enjoy food they can normally only get in an expensive restaurant in town. Now they will have a chance to get the delicious food at/for a very low price.

TPo5 Task 4 

Original

Targeting marketing is a technique in marketing with which the advertiser could deliver commercials to their potential customers more effectively. If a company wants to sell mobile phones they should make different commercials for potential for teenagers they should make advertisements to tell them how beautiful the mobile phones are and how they can enjoy with their friends with this phone for the business customers they should deliver commercials  that they can be more effective and save more money with this mobile phone so different commercials for different groups of people and more effective.

Corrected

Targeting marketing is a technique in marketing with which advertisers could deliver commercials to their potential customers more effectively. If a company wants to sell mobile phones they should make different commercials for different customers. For teenagers they should make advertisements to tell them how beautiful the mobile phones are and how they can enjoy it with their friends.  For the business customers they should deliver commercials that shows how it can allow them to be more effective and save more money. so different commercials for different groups of people are more effective.

TPo5 Task 5

Original

The woman hurt her wrist last week and he has a musical contest to attend next week with three other members. She has two solutions, but jim was not so reliable in the past. I recommend her to take the second option, so he can explain to jim how important and urgent this case is and ask her to devote herself in the rehearsals and do a good job.

Corrected

The woman hurt her wrist last week and has a musical contest to attend next week with her orchestra. Although Jim was not very reliable in the past, I recommend her to take the second option, so she can explain to jim how important and urgent this case is and ask him to devote himself in the rehearsals and do a good job.

TPo5 Task 6 

Original

In the talk two different types of motivations are introduced one in internal motivation one is external. Internal motivation in motivation generated from someone inside, or someone’s will like the lecturer goes to the gym every week not for some reward but because she wants to build her body better. External motivations means some rewards or external you can get money or present from someone and this motivated you to do something.

Corrected

In the talk two different types of motivations are introduced one is internal motivation one is external. Internal motivation is motivation generated from someone inside, or someone’s will like the lecturer who goes to the gym every week not for some reward but because she wants to make her body stronger. External motivations means some reward or external force such as money or presents from someone motivates you to do something.