VIP Class Notes (George)

write a paragraph about a day in a camp.

i have two rabbit. they’re white and cute. they like eating vegetable and rabbit’s food. i always feed them at morning and evening. i like them very much. they’re small, they like a ball touch it. it’s smooth. my sister feed them before, and she feed it for 2 year. at last my sister’s rabbit is really big. like a basketball.  the rabbits have two big eyes, a small nose and a small mouth. sometimes they bite my finger, but i’m not angry, because i like them.

revised:

i have two rabbits. they’re white and cute. they like eating vegetable and rabbit’s food. i always feed them in morning and evening. i like them very much. they’re small, they are/look like a ball, when i touch it, it’s smooth. my sister fed them before, and she fed them for 2 year. at last my sister’s rabbit became really big. like a basketball.  the rabbits has two big eyes, a small nose and a small mouth. sometimes they bite my finger, but i’m not angry, because i like them.

one day mr. bean saw some boys and their car is broken and they will be go to the park and have a race, and they take mr. bean’s car and go to the park, they are having a race to cross the river. mr. bean use toilet door cross the river and he is win.

revised:

one day mr. bean saw some scout boys and their car was broken and they were going to a camp and have a race, and they took mr. bean’s car to go to the camp, they are having a race to cross the river. mr. bean used toilet door to cross the river and he won.

Vocabulary

Scouts: 童子军队员

Camp: 营地

tent: 帐篷