Online Class Notes (Jesse) [W]

Summarise another article.

Focus on checking your nouns – HOW MANY?? add “s” if more than 1
Check all sentences to ensure conjunctions connect all ideas.

As a fans of apple, I used to watch its “ new product launch conference” as it was quite exciting for its invention. But now, I am not so eager to take it as it is not so interesting now. Apple was the leader of smartphone, laptop and pad, in Jobs’ generation, it always created the revolution to the industry as well as the new experience to consumer. From my perspective, Jobs was the key figure of Apple，he advocated innovation and believed that product innovation can dominate the market. In fact, the direction was correct, he changed the concept of the mobile phone and laptop whether in terms of design or function, and gave a refreshing feeling to public every time, so in my mind, apple was an except in product and marketing segment. But unfortunately, in Cook’s generation, the direction of the company has been changed, they focus on the profit and overlook the invention, so they are facing a big challenge as their competitors realize the importance of creativeness and invention, and getting stronger and stronger, so if apple cannot get back to the right direction, they will lose the market.

As a fans of apple, I used to watch its “ new product launch conferences” as it was quite exciting for its inventions / for the innovative inventions we could see / inventions on display. But now, I am not so / really / particularly / as eager to watch / see it as it is not so interesting now. Apple was the leader of smartphones, laptops and tablets, in Jobs’ generation, as / because it always created the revolution in the industry as well as the new experiences for consumers. From my perspective, Jobs was the key figure of Apple，as he advocated innovation and believed that product innovation can dominate the market. In fact, the direction was correct – he changed the concept of the mobile phone and laptop whether in terms of design or function, and gave a refreshing feeling to public every time, so in my mind, apple was an expert in the product and marketing segment. But unfortunately, in Cook’s generation, (I think) the direction of the company has been changed, as / and they focus on the profit and overlook the invention, so they are facing a big challenge as their competitors realize the importance of creativeness and invention, and are getting stronger and stronger. So if apple cannot get back on the right path / get back on track / cannot start moving in the right direction, they will lose the market.

Vocabulary

tablet = ipad etc

I got a travel in NZ – I took a trip / I had a trip 

紧张
nervous – feel a little scared / worried before an event
stressed – feel bad because of too much pressure / unhappy
under a lot of pressure – to have lots of pressure

hearing aide – tech that helps people hear
eg. my grandma has a hearing aide

apple ecosystem – the idea that Apple’s products all connect and need each other

Grammar

will be happened – will happen / will be happening

i haven’t met her after COVID 19 – since COVID 19 

we will ask the doctor to your home – ask the dr to go to your home

it’s too complicated to me – for me