F2F Class Notes (Nicholas) [W]

Active voice & prepositional phrases.

Huawei was recently charged in an American court for fraud, lying, doing business with Iran, and now the Americans are threatening to stop Huawei from selling their phones in other countries — that just so happen to be friends with the United States. What was the USA’s motivation for this? Do you think it’s really about the law and justice? Or perhaps this is about the trade war and politics.  GIVE ME YOUR OPINION! + MAYBE A VERY SHORT SUMMARY OF WHAT HAPPENED

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China first used AI assistive system into criminal trial.(LilyL)
The AI assistive system named 206 system was firstly used at the court in Shanghai China. According to the reports, there are voice recognitions and automatically grasp technologies in the system so it can be functioned as an AI assistance to help the judge to deal with different kinds of judical matters. For example, it can recognize the judge or the prosecutor’s voice and then translate into characters on the screen, or it can also comprehensively present the surveillance video and evidence automatically. Except this functions, what is the most important one is that it can authenticate the evidences through mass date analysis, which can help the judge to reduce the flaw and omission, cutting down the rate of miscarriage of justice. The team leader of 206 system projectHeYaDong said, the system used in Chinese criminal trial is a milestone for the combine of artificial intelligence and judicial trial.

Your Edited Email

The AI Assistive system named “206 System” was first used /was used firstly in a Chinese court — specifically, Shanghai. According to reports, this system possesses / has voice recognition and other AI technologies — AI assistance features — to help judges deal with different kinds of judicial matters. For example, the AI system can recognize the judge or prosecutor’s voice, and then translate it into characters on the screen. It can also automatically present surveillance video and evidence.

Besides these functions, the most important one is the ability to / that it can authenticate the evidence through mass data analysis.

e.g. I like every coffee flavor except chocolate coffee.

e.g. I like all coffees besides chocolate coffees.

e.g. Besides chocolate coffee, I also like vanilla coffee.

**BESIDES = “IN ADDITION TO”**

**EXCEPT = MINUS / SUBTRACTION**

Original

…which can help the judge to reduce the flaws and omissions, cutting down the rate of miscarriage of justice.

**IF IM SPEAKING GENERALLY USUALLY THERE IS NO “THE” AND THE NOUN WILL BE PLURAL”

e.g. Women usually do this…

e.g. Judges usually do that…

Corrected

This can help the judge reduce flaws and omissions — cutting down the rate of justice miscarriages. 

Original

The team leader of 206 system projectHeYaDong said, the system used in Chinese criminal trial is a milestone for the combine of artificial intelligence and judicial trial.

Corrected

The “206 System” project team leader, HeYaDong, said that the system used in Chinese criminal trials is a milestone for this combination of artificial intelligence and the justice system.

Original

On June 22,2018, a man named XinHaiPing committed a cruel homicide in on a bus in the Xian, Shaanxi province. The incident caused 4 people died to die and 7 people to be injured — which astonished people all over the country. (emphasis, dramatic)

The incident caused 4 people died to die and 7 people to be injured, which astonished people all over the country.

It astonished my family too — my mother, my father, my sister — we were all shocked.

Recently, the Xian’s International Meditate People’s Court sentenced him to death and deprived him of his political rights. Why he came into being the evil plan? According to the public reports, XinHaiPing was attacked by malicious injections in the bus and then got ill. The prosecutor said, that incident deeply depressed and aggravated him. So he decided to get revenge the on society by slashing people randomly.