F2F Class Notes (Mason) [W]

Vocabulary

Rural – not developed
eg. New Zealand is very rural

Cooperate/Coordinate – to work with
eg. I often have to coordinate with IT to make sure our payroll system is functioning properly.

Track record – your standing in a company over time
eg. Jon has been missing a lot of work lately, which is weird. He has such a good track record.

Skillset – your skills
eg. Her skillset is exactly what we need for this position.

Grammar

Urging – Urgent

Farmer – Farms

They are not have a lot of high building – They do not have a lot of high building.

Original

Dear Sir/Madam，

I’m Joan from Sisley as a C&B specialist. I saw that you are looking for a C&B candidate and I’m interested in it. Here attached my resume for your reference, if you think l’m suitable for this position, I hope we can have an interview next week. I know that General Mills is a Fortune 500 company and it is also the sixth largest food company in the world. In China, your brands include Haagen-Dazs, Wanchai Ferry, Yoplait and in the USA, you have much more brands like Betty Cooker, Natural Value, etc. It will be an honor if I have an opportunity to join you. Hope to hear some good news from you, thanks.

Best Regards,
Joan Chen

Corrected (Grammar)

Dear Sir/Madam，

I’m Joan Chen, I work as a C&B specialist for Sisley Cosmetics. I saw that you are looking for a C&B candidate and I’m very interested. I have attached my resume for your reference. If you think l’m suitable for this position, I hope we can have an interview next week. I would appreciate the opportunity to work for such a recognized global brand such as General Mills. I know that General Mills is a Fortune 500 company and it is also the sixth largest food company in the world. In China, your brands include Wanchai Ferry, and Yoplait, among others. In the U.S., you have many more brands like Betty Crocker, Natural Value, and Haagen-Dazs. It would be an honor to have an opportunity to join you. Hope to hear some good news from you, thanks.

Best Regards,
Joan Chen

Corrected (Content)

Dear Sir/Madam，

I’m Joan Chen, I work as a C&B specialist for Sisley Cosmetics. I saw that you are looking for a C&B candidate and I’m very interested. I have attached my resume for your reference. I think I would be suitable for this position because I have experience with both the analysis side and the implementation side of C&B. As for analysis, I have much experience doing research on personnel labor costs and productivity. On the implementation side, I have overseen the establishment of various payroll systems, sales incentive programs, and compensation and benefit programs. As you can see, I have the skillset and the track record which will make me a valuable member or your team. If you think l’m suitable for this position, I hope we can have an interview next week. I would appreciate the opportunity to work for such a recognized global brand such as General Mills. I look forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards,
Joan Chen