F2F Class Notes March 30th (Ben)

Original

Many young people like to go camping in mountain areas. Mountain are will bring you a lot of unknown problems, for example, you will easily to lose of direction. However, people who choose mountain areas camping because the y like that kind of challenges and funs. They called that is adventure. ,
I am not a bold girl, so I will choose some places where are more secure to camping. I would like to a beach camping in summer. As I love seeing stars in the night and love listening the sound of sea wave. How romantic it is!
So I don’t need to bring a lot of mountaineering equipments. But the things I think I should bring as followings:
 A tent which can hold more one person.
 A blanket which can make our body warm in the night.
 Several foods like biscuits, bread or canned meat.
 Some bottles of water.
 A compass which can guide the direction.
 A rubbish bag which can collect rubbish and make beach clean.
 Big container portable battery which can supply your electric device energy.
 A camera which can take many beautiful photos.
 A kindly reasonable friend who can take you care.
 Several towels which you can wipe perspiration.
 A torch which you can light the night road or as the signal in emergency circumstance.
 Life jacket which you can wear it quickly if meet unforseeble tsunami.

I hope I can bring my lover to this kind of camping. But unfortunately, I don’t have a boyfriend now.

Edited version

Many young people like to go camping in mountain areas. Mountain camping will bring you a lot of unknown problems, for example, you can lose your direction easily. However, people who choose camping in mountain areas because they like that kind of challenges and fun. (They say) that is adventure.
I am not a bold girl, so I will choose some places that are safer for camping. I would like to go beach-camping in summer. As I love seeing stars at night and love listening to the sound of sea waves. How romantic it is!
So I don’t need to bring a lot of mountaineering equipment. But the things [I think I should bring] are as following:
 A tent which can hold more than one person.
 A blanket which can keep my body warm at night.
 Some food like biscuits, bread or canned meat.
 Some bottles of water.
 A compass which can guide me in the good direction.
 A rubbish bag to collect rubbish and keep the beach clean.
 A high-capacity portable battery which can supply energy to my devices.
 A camera which can take many beautiful photos.
 A kind and reasonable friend who can take care of me.
 Several towels which I can use to wipe sweat.

(= Several towels to wipe sweat)
 A torch to light the night road or to use as an emergency signal
 A life jacket which you can wear it quickly in an unforeseeable tsunami.

I hope I can bring my lover to this kind of camping. But unfortunately, I don’t have one now.

Corrections

1. 可数名词 –> a, the, 复数 or [my, your, his, …]
2. 从句: starts with that, where, when, how…
   • which, that=宾语
   • This is the phone that I want it.
3. 副词: I run quickly. I drive slowly. I am quickly to drive
4. one clause (句) has one subject and one verb

perspiration 名词 = the process of sweating 这个过程

to run = for running. to camp = for camping

I like to camp = I like camping.