F2F Class Notes (Li)[S]

This holiday my friend and I went to Hengdian, Zhejiang from 4th October to 6th October. We drove our car to there for four hours. When we arrived at Hengdian park. So many people at everywhere. The park is very large so we rent a bike and we used four hours to look around the place. The place like the Beijing Palace. There have shooting games and ride horse. This is one of the big park of many other parks. The district have many parks with different style. In the night, we went to special street. There are many people dancing and singing in this street. But they only want to dancing and singing to the people. They are very free.

Revised: 

This holiday my friend and I went to Hengdian, Zhejiang from 4th October to 6th October. We drove our car to there for four hours. When we arrived at Hengdian park there were so many people at everywhere. The park is very large so we rented a bike and we used four hours to ride around the place. The place is like the Beijing Palace. There have are shooting games and you can ride a horse. This is one of the biggest/largest parks but there are other big parks similar to this one. The district has many parks with different styles/themes. In the At night, we went to a special street. There are many people dancing and singing in on this street. But they only want to dance and sing to for the people for free. They are very free/carefree.

Grammar

there are many people at many place on holiday – there are many people everywhere when I went on holiday

Chinese TV shows make in this park – Chinese TV shows are filmed/shot in this park