F2F Class Notes (Kyle) (W)

Next Class Focus, write 5 sentences of what you carry with you everyday and why ? What does my baby need?

to have to = to be required to, need to

to carry / personal items

single use plastic bottle /reusable

Clean teeth

gargle / mouthwash

organized / messy  = adjectives

Original/Authentic/Version (Rough Draft):  

There were four girls in my college dormitory. We were came from different places.Our way of life were different. At first, it was a little unsuitable. But they were all good girls. We soon became good friends.

We liked to cook in the dormitory. Once we cooked soup in the dormitory. Suddenly the wire caught fire. At this time, I ran to the corridor, one ran to the balcony, one ran to pull down the main switch, and one dared not get out of the bed. I thought corridor could run farthest even if the exploded. Because of pull down the main switch, we escaped danger. But if the warden knew, we would be punished. Because electric cookers were forbidden in dormitories.

At the critical moment, we could see the different personalities of four girls.
We laughed for a long time after the storm passed. After that, we bought a new electric cooker to cook and eat in the dormitory secretly.

Corrected Homework:

When I was a university/college student, there were four girls in my college dormitory. We were came from different places. Our ways of life were different. At first, it was a little unsuitable for me. But they were all good girls. We soon became good/close friends.

We liked to secretly cook in the dormitory. Once we were cooking soup in the dormitory. Suddenly, the electrical wire caught fire. At this time, I ran into the corridor/hallway, one of the girls/roommates ran to the balcony, one ran to pull down the main switch, and one dared not get out of the bed. I thought in the corridor I could run farthest away even if the cooker exploded. Thankfully, because one of the girls pulled down the main switch, we escaped from/further danger. But if the warden knew had found out , we would be punished because electric cookers were forbidden in the dormitories.

At such a the critical moment, we could see the different personalities of four girls/ of each other.
We laughed for a long time after the storm passed. After that, we bought a new electric cooker to continue cook and eat in the dormitory secretly.

Vocabulary

To escape(verb) = To leave a dangerous place

Rain —>  a raindrop = One little

Save yourselves ! Everyman for himself / Everyone for themselves! = A famous old movie quote, a joke

Thankfully = Thanks to God, We are so Lucky.

such a critical moment = At a very special time, we realized something 

of each other = all of your girlfriends and you (your story) 

Grammar

*Provide more details for an even better Story *

The weather is cloudy today.

I_____ to  move out -> to have to do something  = very common

We came = the Past Perfect Tense

what is One? one of the girls … one… and  one….  = OK

the storm passed= Writing Technique ! You used a metaphor = to compare something, or paint a picture with words