F2F Class Notes 8th September (Celeste)***

*** Next class talk about roller coasters and things that scare you.

Summary = Who? What? Where? When? Why? How?

***be more specific

eg. How did you get to the water park?

eg. How much time did it take?

3 days ago – Monday

1st Edit

Two days ago, I went to a water park with my friend in Shanghai. The water park iscalled Maya which is next to the amusement park, Happy Valley, that is so far awayfrom downtown. The weather that day was good, not too hot, not too cold, just right. The park is quite big, and you can see waterslides are everywhere, we almost tried every one. They looked really scary, but actually they were not, because they didn’t give me an adrenaline rush. So, I was a little bit disappointed about it.

2nd Edit with more detail

Monday, I went to a water park with my friend in Shanghai. The water park is called Maya which is next to the amusement park, Happy Valley. We took subway line 2 at 11am which took one hour which is so far away from downtown. The weather that day was good, not too hot, not too cold, just right. My perfect weather is when my makeup doesn’t melt off my face.

The park is quite big, and you can see waterslides are everywhere, we almost tried every one.  There were maybe 7-8 water slides. That day was not busy because it was a Monday.

They looked really scary, but actually they were not, because they didn’t give me an adrenaline rush. Roller coasters scare me because they are very tall and very fast. But, these waterslides were not any of these things. So, I was a little bit disappointed about it.