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This is short writing about my work experience below;

I’m working in marketing team of innisfree, the organic cosmetic brand from Korea. I have 6 years marketing experience in beauty industry, 4 years in Korea and 2 years in China. I’m responsible for branding and marketing strategy for China market, as well as executing new product launch campaign. Recently i’m leading Shanghai flagship store renewal project, which is the largest innisfree store in the world and will be re-opened on the end of this year with brand new contents to imporve customer’s purchasing experience. I believe this project will be a great opportunity to learn and understand different kinds of works such as interior designing, product developing, marketing and sales as well.
One of the best achievement i’d got in China is that i launched first brand campaign ‘Playgreen’ in China to reinforce innisfree’s naturalism values and sucessfully held the biggest consumers event ‘Playgreen Festival’ with 2,000 participants in Shanghai.

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This is my short writing about my work experience:

I’m working in the marketing team for Innisfree, the organic cosmetic brand from Korea. I have 6 years marketing experience in the beauty industry, 4 years in Korea and 2 years in China. I’m responsible for branding and marketing strategy for the Chinese market, as well as executing new product launch campaigns. Recently I’ve been leading the Shanghai flagship store renewal project, which is the largest Innisfree store in the world and will be re-opened at the end of this year with brand new products? (not sure) to improve customer’s purchasing experience. I believe this project will be a great opportunity to learn and understand different fields of work such as interior design, product development, marketing and sales.
One of the best achievements I’ve gotten in China is that I launched the first brand campaign ‘Playgreen’ in China to reinforce Innisfree’s naturalism values and successfully held the biggest consumers event ‘Playgreen Festival’ with over 2,000 participants in Shanghai.