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Your Original Email

I am studying stage makeup and costume design at Shanghai Theater Academy. I like my major and I think every girl is interested in this. It not only can make up for actors,but also can make us to most beautiful.
I have learned painting since I was I was a child. So I became an art student when I was in high school. When I was in the second half of the second semester,I went to a studio to learn painting Centrally for eight months. And then I had some tests of some universities. I went to shanghai to test my school’s tests specially. Fortunately，I pass the test of my school. And then I went back to my high school to prepare College entrance examination.
At the beginning I signed up two majors of my school and then I had to choose one . Both of them I liked. Finally,I chose the my major,because I thought it is better for girls. Sure enough there are not a boy in my class. And last year is the same.
I like my major and I will working hard to learn my major.

Your Edited Email

I am studying stage makeup and costume design at Shanghai Theater Academy. I like my major and I think every girl is interested in this. It is not only can make up for actors, but also can help us to be our most beautiful.
I have been studying painting since I was a child. So I became an art student when I was in high school. When I was in the second half of the second semester, I went to a studio to focus on painting for eight months. And then I had some tests at some universities. I came to Shanghai specifically for my school’s exam. Fortunately，I passed it. And then I went back to my high school to prepare for the College entrance examination.
At the beginning I signed up for two majors at my school and then I had to choose one . I liked both of them. Finally, I chose my major, because I thought it is better for girls. Sure enough there are not any boys in my class. And last year was the same.
I like my major and I will work hard to study.