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Thursday，7th December 2017
Today I had classes all day. So I didn’t have time to go to the smart English. It’s my fourth day with the smart English. I never use the e-mail way. So I want to try it.
I had “painting of people whoes face had made up”classes in the morning. Our teacher is pregnant and the doctor suggested she should at home, so she found another teacher to teach us . But she prerecord a video to show us how to paint a mouth. And our homework is painting four mounths by watercolour or colourer pencil.
Afternoon I had a class of art history. I thought our teacher is very knowledgeable. She can teach us chinese and foreign art history without paper. And she can talk about all kinds of types’ especial things and details.
Afer my class my friend and I went to a fitness center when we met a person who is salesman of that fitness center . The fitness center has been decorated lately. I think it too gorgrous and there are many equipments. but I dislike the salesman,he wanted us to join in too quickly.
It’s a little hard to write this essay. I have many words that I can’t spell and I had to looking up. But I think I will be better and better.

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Thursday，7th December 2017
Today, I had classes all day. So I didn’t have time to go to the Smart English and it’s only It’s my fourth day with the Smart English. I never use the e-mail way. So I want to try it.
I had “painting of people who‘s face has make up”classes in the morning. Our teacher is pregnant and the doctor suggested she should stay at home, so she found a substitute teacher. But she prerecorded a video to show us how to paint a mouth. And our homework is painting four mouths by watercolor or colored pencils.
In the afternoon I had an art history class. I thought our teacher is very knowledgeable. She can teach us Chinese and foreign art history without notes. And she can talk in depth about intricate details.
After my class my friend and I went to a fitness center where we met a salesman. The fitness center has been re-decorated recently. I think it’s so gorgeous now and there is a lot of new equipment. but I dislike the salesman, he wanted us to join too quickly. He was pushy.
It’s a little hard to write this essay. I have many words that I can’t spell and I had to look up. But I think I will get better and better.