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I had dyed my hair light brown for the first time at 17years old. I wanted to take on a new look, but it’s very strange when I looked at myself in the mirror. I thought the new hairdo was not appropriate myself, especially the color. I felt a bit anxious when l looked into the mirror lasted about one month, then I had bought many different kinds of clothes to match the new hair color .However, my friends and classmates thought the light brown hair could brighten my skin and look fashionable than before. After one month I had adapted the new hair color gradually, nowdays I dyed my hair once a year with different colors.

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I dyed my hair light brown for the first time when I was 17. I wanted to take on a new look, but it was very strange when I looked at myself in the mirror. I thought the new hairdo was not right for me, especially the color. I felt a bit anxious when l looked into the mirror for the next month, then I had bought many different kinds of clothes to match the new hair color .However, my friends and classmates thought the light brown hair could brighten my skin and look better than before. After one month I had gotten used to the new hair color gradually, nowadays I dye my hair a different color once a year.

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