Email Service Notes (Tony)

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My English class finished at AM 11:00. as soon as I went to the supermarket to buy some material of food for my lunch. There were so many kinds of food which have amazing imported goods.I checked my list what was I need. Then picked mushroom, bean and chose the low fat milk for my diet. Today’s menu was cream pasta.
First I boiled the water putted spaghetti in it for ten minutes , bites it for taste ,after remove into ice water to let it cool down.
Next I would repair the cream sauce. Wipe the mushroom clean, heat the pan to enough hot, which make the cream, mushroom, bean mixed.
At last mixed the spaghetti and cream sauce together.
My lunch was completed.

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My English class finished at 11:00AM. I went to the supermarket right after class to buy some stuff for lunch. There were so many kinds of amazing imported food. I checked my list for what I need. Then I picked some mushrooms, beans and chose the low fat milk for my diet. Today’s menu was cream pasta.
First I boiled the water and put the spaghetti in for ten minutes , I bit it to check if it was done , after I took it out and put it into ice water to let it cool down.
Next prepared the cream sauce. I washed the mushrooms, heated the pan up, and mixed the cream mushrooms and beans together.
At last I mixed the spaghetti and cream sauce together.
My lunch was finished.

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