Email Service Notes (Tony)

Hi Zora, Email Services should only be 200 words. So please make it shorter next time. Thanks 🙂

Also review this email service in your next class. There were some things I didn’t understand.

Your Original Email:

Complaint
I am secretary and Zhengzhou Fenghua Commercial Management Co. Ltd. in CityOn project contract. Your company has always given unreasonable additional terms to our company’s terms and conditions of the contract, Specific requirements are as follows:
1. Requirements documents “company due diligence questionnaire” must fill in our customer information, We have strict confidentiality obligations to our clients and are confidential in business cooperation. We are not allowed to disclose them to the public.
2. Your company asked me to open an account of the bank counterparts staff contact information.
Our bank and cooperation is the company’s confidential, if the public bank staff information, have a certain danger to our account information and property safety, cannot provide. And our bank staff have the obligation to protect our information security, even if we provide bank of export staff contact the bank people have the right to refuse to answer all questions about our property status.
3. your company requires me to provide the company’s high-level organizational structure and the company’s equity distribution.
This is beyond the scope of normal business cooperation. It is our internal architecture information and we can not provide it.
Our company is a well-known international 4A advertising company, serve many customers at home and abroad. We try to cooperate with your company to sign various terms, but your company once inside our spy, all sorts of behavior has seriously violated the normal commercial cooperation signed by the demand, and seriously affect our credibility.
For your rude written request, we cannot complete! Don’t use this information to sign a written contract we both threaten and impede the normal, so please return to normal as soon as possible a written contract, in order to improve the follow-up matters. For all the confidential information of our company have protective attitude, cannot provide, please understand!

Your Corrected Email:

Complaint
I am a secretary at Zhengzhou Fenghua Commercial Management Co. Ltd. in CityOn project contract. Your company has always asked for unreasonable additional terms to our company’s terms and conditions of the contract, Specific requirements are as follows:
1. Requiring documents that show “company due diligence questionnaire” must fill in our customer information, We have strict confidentiality obligations to our clients and are confidential in business cooperation. We are not allowed to disclose the details to the public.
2. Your company asked me to open a bank account for the counterpart’s staff contact information.
Our bank and cooperation is the company’s confidential information, if the public bank staff have this information there is a certain danger to our account information and property safety. And our bank staff have an obligation to protect our information securely, even if we provide bank details of export staff contact the bank people have the right to refuse to answer all questions about our property status.
3. your company requires me to provide the company’s high-level organizational structure and the company’s equity distribution.
This is beyond the scope of normal business cooperation. It is our internal architecture information and we can not provide it.
Our company is a well-known international 4A advertising company, we serve many customers at home and abroad. We try to cooperate with your company to sign various terms, but your company has seriously violated the normal commercial cooperation terms signed by the demand, and it seriously affects our credibility.
For your rude written request, we cannot abide! Don’t use this information to sign a written contract we both threaten and impede the normal business, so please return to normal as soon as possible a written contract, in order to improve the follow-up matters. For all confidential information our company has a protective attitude, we cannot provide that information to others, please understand!