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Last month, I had a business trip to go to Kuala Lumpur to visit the local showroom and furniture exhibition. I went here alone so I worried about a bit.
I booked the ticket in the website. So that morning I went the ShenZhen airline reception to check in directly. I took one suitcase and purse only so no luggage needed to check.
After I got the ticket, I need to pass the security, all the bags were required to check by the scanner, they inspect the inside of the bag, to confirm there was no illegal things. They also check every passenger with metal detector, because metal things like knife are forbidden as well. People need to pass the security gate one by one, because this is restricted area other than baby or pregnant.
It almost took me an hour to pass the security. The ticket showed me gate 11 to wait the airplane. Fortunately, the plane didn’t delay.
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After 4 days business trip, I got back to shanghai. this was not a direct line, so layover 3 hours in Shenzhen airport, but unfortunately the plane delays 2 hours. When I arrived to shanghai hongqiao airport was almost 11 pm. Then I go the baggage claim to pick up my suitcase. By the way, I bought some cosmetic in the Kuala Lumpur which were more than 100ml so was forbidden to carry.

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Last month, I had a business trip to Kuala Lumpur to visit the local showroom and furniture exhibition. I went there alone so I was a bit worried.
I booked the ticket online. So that morning I went the ShenZhen airline reception to check in. I took one suitcase and purse only so no luggage needed to be checked.
After I got the ticket, I needed to pass through security, all my bags had to go through the scanner. They inspected the inside of the bag, to confirm there were no illegal things. They also checked every passenger with metal detectors, because metal things like knives are forbidden as well. People need to go through security gate one at a time, because this is a restricted area, except for babies or pregnant women.
It almost took me an hour to get through security. The ticket said I was going to gate 11 to wait for the airplane. Fortunately, the plane wasn’t delayed.
Back
After a 4 day business trip, I got back to Shanghai. This was not a direct flight, so I had a layover for 3 hours in the Shenzhen airport, but unfortunately the plane was delayed 2 hours. When I got back to Shanghai hongqiao airport it was almost 11 pm. Then I went to the baggage claim to pick up my suitcase. By the way, I bought some cosmetics in Kuala Lumpur which were more than 100ml so they were forbidden to take with me.

Great way to use all the words from your class Amy! Good Job 🙂