Email Service Notes (Raph)

Your Original Email

Take sb down

– Hello?
– Hello, bro. My computer broke down before I save my essay which I prepared for 4 hours.
– Oh my god. Can’t believe it happened.
– Yup. It’s a disaster, but don’t worry. It won’t take me down.
– What did you say? Sorry, my phone has really bad reception here.
– I said it wouldn’t take me down.
– When’s the deadline of your essay?
– Tomorrow noon.
– Let me help you with your essay.
– It’s so sweet of you! I can feel the tear welling up inside me.
– I wonder what’s the topic of your essay.
– How to dance like a monkey.
– It’s a real shame that I know nothing about either dance or monkey. You have to do it by yourself. I’d love to help you, but I can’t. Sorry. I’ll talk to you later. Have a good one!

Your Edited Email

Take sb down

– Hello?
– Hello, bro. My computer crashed before I saved my essay, which I had taken me 4 hours to prepare.
– Oh my god. Can’t believe that happened.
– Yup. It’s a disaster, but don’t worry. I won’t let this take me down.
– What did you say? Sorry, my phone has really bad reception here.
– I said I won’t let this take me down.
– When is the your essay’s deadline?
– Tomorrow at noon.
– Let me help you with it.
– That’s so sweet of you! I’m tearing up!
– What’s the topic of your essay.
– How to dance like a monkey.
– It’s a real shame that I know nothing about either dancing or monkeys. I’d love to help you, but I can’t, so you’ll have to do it by yourself. I’m very sorry. I’ll talk to you later. Have a good one!