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I went to Japan in May this year. It was my second time being there.

My first time to Japan was in last year. I visited several cities located in the west of the country with my family. In Kyoto we visited a famous old temple and the palace where the Kings lived before. In Nara we went to an interesting garden. Many dears lives there and they are not afraid of human. My daughters enjoyed feeding dears. For the last part of trip we stayed in Osaka for a couple of days, just walking around the city and doing some shopping.

The destination for my second tip to Japan is Toky, the capital of the country,which has many places of interest. The city is one of the most popular place for the visitors among the world. It will cost long time if you want yo explore all the enjoyment of the city. But I’ve only got 3 days for my vacation.I took my kids to the Disneyland at the first day. The dreaming experience brought them so much fun. Then we stayed in a beautiful and peaceful hotel near the foot of Mountain Fuji.I was totall impressed by the views there.

I think Japan is a great country, with long history ,friendly people and stunning scenery. The joyful experience travelling to Japan with my family was full of happy memories. I’m sure we would like to go there one more time in the future.

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I went to Japan in May this year. It was my second time being there.

My first time to Japan was in last year. I visited several cities (located) in the west of the country with my family. In Kyoto we visited a famous old temple and the palace where the Kings used to live / lived before. In Nara we went to an interesting garden. Many dears deer** live lives there and they are not afraid of humans. My daughters enjoyed feeding the deer dears. For the last part of trip we stayed in Osaka for a couple of days, just walking around the city and doing some shopping.

The destination for my second trip to Japan is was Tokyo, the capital of the country, which has many places of interest. The city is one of the most popular places for the visitors / tourist destinations among in the world. It will cost take a long time if you want to / It would take a long time to explore all the enjoyment enjoyable sites of the city, but I’ve only got 3 days for my vacation. I took my kids to the Disneyland / to the Tokyo Disneyland at on the first day. The dreaming / fantasyland experience brought them so much fun. Then we stayed in a beautiful and peaceful hotel near the foot of Mountain Fuji. I was totally impressed by the views there.

I think Japan is a great country, with a long history, friendly people, and stunning scenery. The joyful experience of travelling to Japan with my family was full of / created many happy memories. I’m sure we would like to go there one more time / again in the future.

** I actually looked it up and found that the word “deers” is possible, but it’s not very common.
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/deer?s=t