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question from IELTS 12 test 7-test 1
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the graph shows how many time people in the USA ate at fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
In general, the majority of people went to fast-food restaurants once a week and once or twice a month. but the number of people who entered the restaurant once a week increased a bit in 2006 by about 2% to 33% and decreased by about 5% to 27.5%; on the contrary, the amount who eat at the restaurant once or twice a month went down by 5% to 25% and went up steeply by around 8% to 37.5%.
Additionally, the minority of people ate at fast-food restaurants every day or never, respectively account for under 5% and 5%. And both fall slightly and became stable.
the rest went to the restaurant several times a week or a few times a year, respectively account for 17% and 13%. the number of people went several times a week rose to 20% and fell to about 16%, others increased a little to 15% and stayed stable.

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question from IELTS 12 test 7-test 1
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Composition:
The graph shows how many times people in the USA ate at fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
In general, the majority of people went to fast-food restaurants between once a week and once or twice a month. But, the number of people who entered the restaurant once a week increased a bit in 2006, by about 2% to 33% and but then decreased by about 5% to 27.5% (During what period? The way it’s written, it sounds like it went both up and down at the same time); on the contrary other hand,** the amount of people who eat ate at the a restaurant / who ate out once or twice a month went down by 5% to 25% and then went up steeply by around 8% to 37.5% (again, during what periods?).
Additionally, the minority of people who ate at fast-food restaurants every day or never, respectively, account for under 5% each and 5%. And Later / In the period from April 20th, 2024 to April 20th, 2024 both fall fell slightly and became stable. The rest of the participants, who went to the restaurant several times a week or a few times a year, respectively account for 17% and 13%. The number of people went several times a week rose to 20% and fell to about 16% (during what period), while others increased a little to 15% and stayed stable.

“on the contrary” means that something is not what we thought it was.
“on the other hand” means that we are talking about something else that is not like the first thing.

Only use respectively when two things have different values or adjectives. When they are the same use both, neither, or each, depending upon the context.