Email Service Notes (Nick)

Your Original Email

Since the previous job wasn’t that suitable for me，I began to looking for a new job. I prefer to work on brand communication，instead of e-commerce marketing.

Last week, I got the new job offer as from the company which runs a lingerie brand. The position is senior brand communication manager, I think it is better than the previous one, because the brand has stable design team for the comfortable products, and its brand positioning is very clear to the target market, then the most important thing is that the founder of the brand insist on what the brand should be. So I am confident that I can help to build the brand awareness and attack more and more women costumers like the brand. And fortunately, the office is near the jiangsu road station, so it’s close to Smart English, It will be convenient for English class after work.

However, marketing is always a busy work, so I don’t know if there will be much overtime work, I’ll see what the situation is like, I hope the job can balance my private life.

Your Edited Email

Since the previous job wasn’t that suitable for me, I began to looking for a new job. I prefer to work on brand communication instead of e-commerce marketing.

Last week, I got the a new job offer as from the a company that runs a lingerie brand. The position is senior brand communication manager. I think it is better than the previous one, because the brand has a stable design team for the / producing comfortable products, and its brand positioning relative to the target market is very clear to the target market. then The most important thing is that the founder of the brand insist on what the brand should be. So I am confident that I can help to build the brand awareness and attack attract more and more female women consumers like to the brand. And fortunately, the office is near the Jiangsu Road station, so it’s close to Smart English. It will be convenient for me to go to English class after work.

However, marketing is always a busy work field / industry, so I don’t know if there will be much time left over after overtime work. I’ll see what the situation is like. I hope the job can balance with my private life / I hope I can maintain a good work-life balance.