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Hi Nick
Please help me to correct conjuction words below,thank you!

Who
I have a colleague who is like to eat fish very much
That guy who is looks like a superstar
My daughter is classmate who live in Pu dong district

Where
I couldn’t forget a private hotel where is locate in the Fukuoka Japan
I want to make a reservation of hotel which is in the Hannan province for my family in the summer
Do you want to go to a India restaurant where is locate on the Wu jiang Road.

What
This story is what I mentioned before.
You work hard what is reason for your position now
Economist worry what the CPI point is improve too quick.

Which
They make a plane for their honeymoon which is how to play in the America.
That girl has already cry for whole day which is she lose a competition in fencing.
You need find some target which are your real potential customers.

That
You need to work hard that is useful method to keep your position
I love my family that is my energy for my work
A special thing that about how to keep a better relationship with your relative in China

Your Edited Email

Hi Nick
Please help me to correct the conjunctions words below, thank you!

Who
I have a colleague who is really likes to eat fish very much
That is the guy who is looks like a superstar
My daughter has a classmate who lives in Pudong district

Where
I couldn’t forget a private hotel where that is located in the Fukuoka Japan
I want to make a reservation of at a hotel, which is in the Hainan province, for my family in the summer (best to use the commas ( , , ) with “which,” and use “that” without commas)
Do you want to go to a the Indian restaurant where (that is) located on the Wujiang Road.
This is the hotel in Hainan where we will make a reservation for our summer vacation.
This is the private hotel in Fukuoka, Japan where we stayed.

“Where” works like “who,” but with places. It isn’t actually to tell where a place is, but to relate a place to some further information, like something that happened at that location.

What
This story is what / the one that I mentioned before.
Your hard work [noun, not verb] hard what is the reason for your position now
Economists worry what that the CPI point is improving too quickly.
Your hard work is what convinced me to promote you.
The swift increase in the CPI is what has economists worried.

Remember, “what” works like the middle term in a logical argument: x = y, y = z, therefore x = z.
Both of my examples could be written directly instead:
e.g. Your hard work convinced me to promote you.
e.g. The swift increase in the CPI has economists worried.
What we want to emphasize with “is what” is the relation to something we were talking about before and that what we are saying now is the same as the previous topic.
e.g. (from the TV:) “New information on the economy that has come out today from the US Department of Labor has economists worried.” (someone hearing only this line asks a friend:) “What has economists worried?” (response:) “The swift increase in the CPI is what has economists worried.”
The reason we use “is what” is to connect the TV report about worried economists to the real-world conditions that cause them to worry.

Which
They make a plane for their honeymoon which is how to have fun play in the United States / America (don’t use “the” with “America”).
That girl has already cried for the/a whole day which is because she lost a fencing competition in fencing. (This second half of this sentence expresses a reason, not just extra information)
You need find some a target which for those who are / that accurately describes your real potential customers.
He calls himself a prestidigitator, which is just a fancy word for “magician.” The part of the sentence after “which” is not necessary to the sentence, it is to clarify the meaning of one of the words, which is “extra” information (even if it is necessary for a particular reader to understand the sentence).
My cat is a black, not a gray, cat – that the cat is not gray is only for emphasis, thus it is “extra”
I am worried because I broke a mirror today, which is a traditional sign of bad luck – the second part is an explanation of the context of the first part, which is “extra”

That
You need to work hard; that is a useful method to keep your position
— In this sentence, “that” is a pronoun that represents the idea of “working hard. If I rewrite the sentence, this becomes clear: “Working hard is a useful method to keep your position.” I inserted a semicolon ( ; ) because these are actually two separate sentences connected by one idea, replaced in the second part by that.
I love my family; that is my energy for my work (same idea as the first: “My love for my family is the motivation for my work”)
A special thing, that about how to keep a better relationship with your relatives in China (here also, “that” is a pronoun referring to the “special thing” that helps you to build a stronger relationship with your relatives in China)

Remember, use “that” to add necessary information about something. Usually, this is information that distinguishes among different possibilities using a phrase:
Compare:
e.g. I ate the green apple (the one that was green, not any other apple, like a red or yellow one)
e.g. I ate the apple that was sitting on the table (the one that was on the table, not the one in the fridge)
— In both cases, the information is necessary so that the reader knows exactly which apple I ate. In the first, just an adjective is sufficient. In the second, I need to use an adjective phrase (a whole phrase that only serves to describe a noun).
e.g. I ate the apple, which I found on the table (my reader already knew which apple I ate, it was clear at the beginning, and I just wanted to tell you that I found it on the table though this information was not necessary).