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What annoys me about living in Shanghai may include:

1. Everything seems to be too expensive.
Gas, water, not to mention the housing price, mostly because there is limited amount of resources here.

2. Sometimes strangers are quite impolite towards each other and show a bad attitude.
That annoys me because i dislike conflicts especially those that seem avoidable or just meaningless.

3. It also annoys me a bit that people may have stereotypes towards the east and think of Shanghai as merely a developing city.
But that is just to say. I wouldn’t know what stereotypes exist in people’s mind.

4. Last but not least, it is hard to make money in such a big city, with lots of competition and lack of opportunities versus too many people.

Your Edited Email

What annoys me about living in Shanghai may includes:

1. Everything seems to be too expensive.
Gas, water, not to mention the housing prices / rent, mostly because there is are limited amount of resources here.

2. Sometimes strangers are quite impolite towards each other and show a bad attitude.
That annoys me because I dislike conflicts, especially those that seem avoidable or just meaningless.

3. It also annoys me a bit that some people may have stereotypes towards the east and think of Shanghai as merely a developing city.
But that is just to say: I wouldn’t know what stereotypes exist in peoples‘ minds / what stereotypes people entertain.

4. Last but not least, it is hard to make money in such a big city, with lots of fierce competition and lack of opportunities versus too many people / with a market that cannot sustain full employment for such a large population.

[These are mostly upgrades, as the grammar was very good.]