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Hi Helen，
The agenda of ECADI delegation is as followed,
Date From – To
25th, Oct., Thursday Amsterdam – Hague – Delft
26th, Oct., Friday Delft – Brugelette
27th, Oct., Saturday Brugelette – Liege
28th, Oct., Sunday Liege – Wageningen – Arnhem
29th, Oct., Monday Arnhem – Amsterdam
30th, Oct., Tuesday Amsterdam – Shanghai
Vehicle: a business car with 8 or 9 seats throughout the trip will be arranged by an tourist agency of the client
Number of people: Three
Interpreter: None
Language: one person can speak English a little
The date Halfen need to arrange: 27th,October
Time to arrive at Belgium: on the afternoon of 26th, Oct.
Time to leave Belgium: on the morning of 28th , Oct.
The agenda in Belgium would be flexible, it could be updated by Halfen arrangement.

Thanks a lot and have a good day!

Mark Sun
+86 1391 8017 696

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Hi Helen，
The agenda of the ECADI delegation is as follows:
Date From – To
25th, Oct., Thursday: Amsterdam – Hague – Delft
26th, Oct., Friday: Delft – Brugelette
27th, Oct., Saturday: Brugelette – Liege
28th, Oct., Sunday: Liege – Wageningen – Arnhem
29th, Oct., Monday: Arnhem – Amsterdam
30th, Oct., Tuesday: Amsterdam – Shanghai
Vehicle: a business car with 8 or 9 seats throughout the trip will be arranged for the whole trip by a tourist agency for the client
Number of people: Three
Interpreter: None
Language: one person can speak a little English a little
The date Halfen needs to arrange: 27th,October (needs to arrange what?)
Time of arrival in Belgium: in the afternoon of 26th, Oct.
Time of departure from Belgium: in the morning of 28th , Oct.
The agenda in Belgium would be flexible, and it can be updated by arrangement with Halfen.

Thanks a lot and have a good day!

Mark Sun
+86 1391 8017 696

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