Email Service Notes (Lily)

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I’m Polly. I am 27 years old. I was born in Shanghai. I live in Baoshan district. I studied administration in university.

I work for a Japanese company that manufactures and sells machinery for lifts and cars. I go to work by subway. It takes me 1 hour to go to work. I have been working here for 3 years. I like my job because it has a good atmosphere.

When I’m not working, I Iike to run half marathon. I run 3 times a week. When I first took part in the marathon, I was a little nervous and I wasn’t confident. So I trained hard. I enjoy the half marathon twice a year.

I also work as a volunteer in the blood center. Because I like children When I helping people make me happy. I have been doing it for 7 years.

I don’t speak English well but I study hard.
I like to travel so I need to study English, I want to go to more places.

Your Edited Email


I’m Polly. I am 27 years old. I was born in Shanghai. I live in Baoshan district. I specialized/majored in administration in university.

I work for a Japanese company that manufactures and sells machinery for lifts and cars. I go to work by subway. It takes me 1 hour to go to work. I have been working here for 3 years. I like my job because it has a good atmosphere/ vibe. 

When I’m not working/ In my spare time, I Iike to run half marathon. I run for 3 times a week. When I first took part/participated/ joined in the marathon, I was a little nervous and I wasn’t confident. So I trained hard. I enjoy the half marathon (twice a year).

I also work as a volunteer in the blood center. Because I like children, therefore when I helping people, it makes me happy/ I find joy in helping others. I have been doing it/I have been working there for 7 years.

I don’t speak English well but I study hard.
I like to travel so I need to study English, I want to go to more places.