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I have an English class on Wednesday afternoon, the day is the hump day on the busy street people seem to be in a hurry. This is the summer day afternoon, The cruel weather is very hot that make me uncomfortable.
Every time when I cross the underground of the Jing An Temple metro station there was an old lady sat here and sold a kind of small white flowers which smell very nice. I ‘m completely amazed at that old lady sold flowers in such hot weather. She looked very independent.

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I have an English class on Wednesday afternoon, the day is the hump day (what do you mean hump day?) and on the busy street people seem to be in a hurry. It is a summer day‘s / day in the afternoon, and the cruel weather is very hot which makes me feel really uncomfortable.
Every time when I cross the underground of JingAn Temple metro station there is an old lady sitting there selling a kind of small white flowers which smell very nice. I ‘m completely amazed that the old lady sells flowers in such hot weather. She seems very independent / it seems like she is really independent.