Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Hi Ivy, good morning! Was really nice to meet you last Friday. After my deep consideration. It’s really hard for me for down grade position for me now. Please let me know if there have any other position suitable for me. I do really like Hilton brand for sure and a lot passion for the luxury market. If you don’t mind. I’m more then happy to introduce the potential client for you for sure !! you are definitely the Boss I really like, I’m sure we will have opportunity for working together for near future. Cheers, Melody

Your Edited Email

Hi Ivy, good morning! It was really nice to meet you last Friday. After serious consideration, I feel that downgrading my position at this stage in my career is simply not possible for me. Please let me know if there have any other positions that may be suitable for me. I do really like the Hilton brand and have a lot passion for the luxury market. If you don’t mind – I‘d be more than happy to introduce any potential clients to you! I am definitely a big fan of yours and I hope we will have the opportunity to work together in the near future. Thanks again and all the best, Melody

I made it a little warmer and fixed up some of the grammar and vocabulary 🙂