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An unforgettable trip
Once my Swedish friend asked me if I wanted to travel to Zhangjiajie, which would take three days. At that night I decided I would go with my friends.
Last Monday at 4pm, our trip started. There were six people in the group. I am the only Chinese. One is from Japan, one is from sweden, one is from Belgium and two are from Korea. It was the first time I taked the airplane. At 23:00pm, we arrived in Zhangjiajie. A guy drove us to a hotel, which was chosen by my friend. The fact was it was a very good choice to live in.
On Tuesday morning, we went to the forest park. It was so big that we hiked from day to afternoon. During the hiking, we took a lot of big pictures. We also taked the cable bus. Looking out of the cable bus, the scenery was so amazing and wonderful.
The second the we also climed the mountain. I think it was the most wonderful day of three days. At night we ate in a restaurant. We ate, drank and laughed and everyone enjoyed the dinner time. The third we walked through the glass bridge, which was the most famous spot in Zhangjiajie. It was over three hundreds meters high and the span was more than four hundreds meter. Walking on the bridge was so amazing. At 23:50pm we took the plane back home.
I could not image that my first plan trip was with five friends from different countries. I like this experience. I believe for everyone it is a good memory.

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An unforgettable trip
Once my Swedish friend asked me if I wanted to travel to Zhangjiajie, which would take three days. On that night I decided I would go with my friends.
Last Monday at 4pm, our trip started. There were six people in the group and I was / with me being the only Chinese. One was from Japan, one was from sweden, one was from Belgium and two were from Korea / there was one Japanese, Swede, Belgian, and two Koreans. It was the first time for me to fly in a plane. At 11pm, we arrived in Zhangjiajie and a guy drove us to a hotel, which was chosen by my friend. The fact was, it was a very good choice to stay in that hotel. (“the fact was” expression doesn’t really fit here. Maybe you can say “in fact”)
On Tuesday morning, we went to the forest park which was so big that we hiked from the morning to afternoon. During the hike, we took a lot of big (what do u mean “big”?) pictures. We also took the cable car which had a really beautiful view.
On the second day the we also climbed a mountain (or the same mountain?). I think it was the most wonderful day of the three days. At night we went out for dinner. We ate, drank and laughed and everyone enjoyed themselves / everyone had a great time. On the third day we walked over the glass bridge, which is the most famous spot in Zhangjiajie. It is over three hundred meters high and spans more than four hundred meters. Walking on the bridge was so amazing. At 23:50pm we took the plane back home.
I could not imagine that my first plane trip would be with five friends from different countries. I loved this experience and I believe it was a good memory for everyone.