Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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Chinese government have to recognize the growing gap between rich and poor around the world ，when nation‘s rapid economic growth. The rich man will be richer and the poor man will be poorer. Majority of people will be less happiness and secure about their futures. So government should find a way to slove the problems from the root and lead people more happiness.
Based on a survey，there are some performances of the gap between the rich and the poor in our country . First of all, income in the cities is really higher than countrysides.
In the past ten years, the gap of them increase to ten tims. Besides, The income gap between industries is also increasing. We need government‘s policy to change the present situation.
I deem that solve the unfair social distribution and the big gap between the rich and the poor has become an unavoidable problem in the process of social development.

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The Chinese government must / has to recognize the growing gap between rich and poor around the world ，especially when there is rapid economic growth. The rich will be richer and the poor will be poorer. The majority of people will be less happy and feel less secure about the future. So / Therefore the government should find a way to solve the problems from the root and lead people towards greater happiness.
Based on a survey，there are some gaps between the rich and the poor in our country . First of all, the income in cities is much higher than in the countryside.
In the past ten years, the gap has increased 10 times / 10 fold. Besides this, the income gap between industries is also increasing. We need government policies to change in order to solve the current crisis.
I deem that solving the unfair social distribution and the big gap between the rich and the poor to be an unavoidable problem related to the process of social development.