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This essay will talk about my hometown Shijiazhuang of Hebei . Shijiazhuang is the capital of Hebei . I think there are nothing specil of Shijiazhuang . Because I think there isn’t have dialect and specil food. And I think the well-known of Shijiazhuang is haze(about pm2.5) at these years. I liked haze in the high scool ,because if had it we haven’t running in the morning .When I searched Shijiazhuang specil in the baidu ,I just found some specil food in the cities or the countrysides around Shijiazhuang . Such as the big jujubes in Zaihuang,the Snowflake Pear in Zhao country town and so on. So I think Shijiazhuang is not a good city of tour. But there was a position about people’s happiness of china’s cities. Shijiazhuang is in the top of that. I think the reason is the CPI wasn’t high and the pace of life is slower than some big cities. These years shijiazhuang’s air is better than some years ago. Last year Shijiazhuang had the subway ,and we go somewhere more convenient.

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This essay will talk about my hometown Shijiazhuang of Hebei province. Shijiazhuang is the capital of Hebei. I think there are nothing special about Shijiazhuang because I don’t think they have their own dialect or special food and I think what Shijiazhuang is well known for is the haze(about pm2.5) these days / over the last few years. I liked the haze when I was athigh school ,because when it was hazy we didn’t need to run in the morning .When I searched for special things in Shijiazhuang on baidu ,I just found some special food in the cities or the countrysides around Shijiazhuang . Such as the big jujubes in Zaihuang, the Snowflake Pear in Zhao country town and so on. So I think Shijiazhuang is not a good city for tourists. However there was a ranking of people’s happiness among china’s cities and Shijiazhuang is at the top of that. I think the reason is the CPI isn’t high and the pace of life is slower than some big cities. These days shijiazhuang’s air is better than some years ago and last year Shijiazhuang had a subway built there so we can go places more conveniently.