Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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I have a friend，her name is Angelina. Who come from Korea. We met each other in Philippines. That time we want to improved our English skill. So we went to a academy for study English about for 3months. Even we thought studying made our really tired. But that is my happiest memories in past time. I don’t had any pressure and i don’t need to thinking about work. At that time，I always chatted with Angelina when we in spare time. She has a positive thinking and many virtues. We have the same hobbies and attitude to life. We don’t like corporate culture. We hope open a store together in the near future，like a coffee shop or guest house.

Your Edited Email

I have a Korean friend，whose name is Angelina. We met each other in the Philippines at a time that we both wanted to improve our English skill. So we went to an academy to study English about for 3 months. Even though we though studying made us really tired / studying was really tiring, But it is my happiest memory (of the past). I didn’t have any pressure and i didn’t need to think about work. At that time，I always chatted with Angelina when we had spare time. She has a positive mindset / she is really positive and has many virtues. We have the same hobbies and attitude to life and neither of us like corporate culture. We hope to open a store together in the near future，like a coffee shop or guest house.

Linda – review this with your teacher next class. Focus on how to use prepositions to add verbs (to do), using conjunctions to connect ideas, and building complex sentences.