Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Hi XXX：

We’d like to recruit one intern for competitor database collecting,
Attachment is the JD file

Any comments, pls. contact me,

Thanks,

Your Edited Email

Hi XXX：

We’d like to recruit one intern for competitor database collecting,
Attached is the JD file

Please contact me should you have any questions or comments.

Thanks,

– I would suggest reviewing this email in class and explaining to the teacher who you are emailing, what feeling you want to give them, and giving more detail about each part so we can write this email better for you.