Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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smoking is a danger to whole world, its danger will not to be measure. smoking will pollute an air , endanger healthy,make plunge cancer rise quadruple. in order to make people all over nation focus on tobacco’s prevail and prevent disease and death due to smoking,WTO called “World No Tobacco Day” in 5.31 annual
dependent user said it is easy for without eating per day,it is difficult for no smoking.the smoking is difficult to disappear,but it is not difficult for everyone. to aware that smoking is not advantage for us ,maybe you can get ride of the attraction of tabocoo,get ride of smoking needs to insist, only keep insisting, it will be success

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smoking is a danger to the whole world but its danger is hard to measure / cannot be measured. smoking pollutes the air , endangers healthy people / is unhealthy / is bad for our health, and makes  cancer risk quadruple. in order to make people all over the nation focus on tobacco’s prevalence and prevent disease and death due to smoking, the WTO called for “World No Tobacco Day” on 5.31 / the 31st of May annually
dependent / addicted users say it is easy to not eat for a day, but it is difficult to not smoke. the smoking is difficult to disappear completely, but it is not difficult for everyone – discuss this sentence in class – not sure what you mean. to be aware that smoking is not advantageous for us ,may help you to get rid of the attraction of tabocoo. Getting rid of / quitting smoking needs users to abstain, and only through constant abstinence, will they be successful