Email Service Notes (Jacob)

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Your Original Email

Today I woke up at 7 am and then open TV to hear news ，and in the same time，i did coffee and cooked omelet for breakfast. After then，i begin to my work by phone or computer at 8:30 am. Afer work of AM i checked the train track go to another city，but since the weather，some trains were stop work today，its bad news to me，i try to find other ways，its lucky that i find it，（sui ran）i has no seat and wast some times ，but i can keep the plan for tomorrow work，so now I’m doing my homework on the train.

Your Edited Email

Today I woke up at 7 am and then open turned on the TV to hear listen to the news，and in at the same time I did made coffee and cooked an omelet for breakfast. After that，I began to my work by using phone or computer at 8:30 am [Explain this sentence to the teacher for more accurate correction]. Afer work of AM I checked the train track to go to another city，but since because of the weather，some trains were stop not working today. It was bad news to for me，I tried to find other ways，its lucky that i found one，（sui ran）I had no seat and wasted some time，but i can keep the plan for work tomorrow，so now I’m doing my homework on the train.

Edited by Jacob @ SE

Hi Karen, during your next class at SE you can ask the teacher to go over some of the corrections above such as
– After that/then
– a/an/the
– Verb usage & tenses
– Since vs because & because of