Email Service Notes April 14th (Ben)

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Good job Zora ! It was an interesting read.

Pay attention to the tenses. If the story is in the past, then every verb is in the past !

Original

An interview story about me.
A few days ago, I have an interview with company ‘B’, The interviewer is a team manager and we have a long good talking. I think I will get that job what I want. when I waiting the company B ‘s offer, I got a call from the personnel. She told me the team director want to see me and have a talk, so I have an interview about a team for twice. The personnel and I made the appointed time, and according to appointment I met with the team director. The chat didn’t going very well. I think I lost a chance to go to a good position in an ad agency. By the way introduce my job with you, I’m working for an ad agency and my job is in charge of advertising on the internet and ensure clients advertising is as planned. My clients include HM Coach and so on. There is an old saying said god close a door, but god opened a window for you. Now I transfer the team in the company without a higher salary,but I can study more about advertising putting, I think I’m so luck.

Edited version

An interview story about me.

A few days ago, I had an interview with company ‘B’. (past)

The interviewer was a team manager and we had a long good talk. (past)

I thought I would get that job that I want. (1. past, 2. future of the past)

When I was waiting the company B ‘s offer, I got a call from the HR. She told me the team director wanted to see me and have a talk, so I had an interview with two different teams. (past)

The HR and I made an appointment and I met with the team director at the appointed time.

But the chat didn’t go very well. (连接词)

I think I lost a chance to get a good position in that ad agency.

By the way, let me introduce my job to you.

I’m working for an ad agency and I am in charge of advertising on the internet and ensuring clients’ advertising go as planned.

My clients include HM Coach and others.

There is an old saying which goes that when God closes a door, he opens a window for you.

Now I joined the team in that company without a higher salary, but I can study more about advertising putting (layout?), so I think I was lucky. (past)