Email Service 20th March (Jesse)

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Today, I made an important decision that I accepted an offer. I felt a bit nervous before I send the reply mail to the HR. And my friend thought that I was becoming more mature, because I realized that I should treat every decision carefully now.
I had 8 interviews from January, but only received two offers. I was confident about my ability and success rate for many years. However, the experience I had these 3 months made me felt of loss, and suspicious about the position of myself. I can’t believe in it that attending interview and getting an offer in one day. All the things seemed smooth, but I didn’t lay my heart down.
I think I should rebuild my confidence and attitude to face more challenges. Trust myself and time will show me the result.

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Today, I made an important decision to accept a job offer. I felt a bit nervous before I sent the reply mail to the HR department, and my friend thought that I was becoming more mature, because I have realized that I should treat every decision carefully / with care / I should take every decision seriously.
I had 8 interviews from January to now, but only received two offers. I have been confident about my ability and success rate for many years. However, the experience I had during these 3 months made me feel at a bit of a loss, and suspicious about the position of myself (what do you mean?). I can’t believe in it that attending interview and getting an offer in one day. All the things seemed smooth, but I didn’t lay my heart down. – review next class!
I think I should rebuild my confidence and attitude to face more challenges. Trust myself, and time will show me the result.