Demo Class Notes (Phoebe – Jesse)

First story

i go to switzerland with my husband and i like the weather and the nature is very beautiful.

I wake up at about 8 o’clock in the morning and eat some bread, milk for my breakfast and then take my son to have his hockey practice. Just watch him play. I eat a bowl of chinese noodle for my lunch.

Corrected

i have been to switzerland 5 years ago with my husband. I think the weather is amazing and the nature is very beautiful.

I woke up at about 8 o’clock in the morning. I ate some bread, and drank milk for my breakfast and then took my son to have his hockey class. I just watched the class outside. I ate a bowl of Chinese noodles for my lunch.

Jesse’s changes

i went to switzerland 5 years ago with my husband and I think the weather there is amazing and the environment is very beautiful.

I woke up at about 8 in the morning / AM and then had some bread and milk for breakfast. After that / afterwards I took my son (who is an 8 year old boy / who is learning hockey) to have hockey class which was interesting. I just watched the class from outside and took pictures during the class. I ate a bowl of Chinese noodles for lunch which were not bad.

Vocabulary

i went / took a trip / went on a holiday to switzerland 5 years ago with my husband and I think / In my opinion / I reckon / I feel the weather there is amazing / spectacular / incredible / fantastic and the environment is very / super / really / amazingly beautiful.

which / who 
eg. I have a computer. It is black. = I have a computer which is black.
eg2. I went to the shops which was fun.

and then = After that

anniversary – celebrate being together for a number of years
eg. me and my husband had our 5 year anniversary last week

Grammar

I went – past – time is important
I have been – past – time is NOT important
eg. I have been to Australia 5 times = experience in my life
eg2. I went to Australia last year = time is specific

eat / ate 
dance / danced